A sunset in Iraq

Published on March 6, 2006 By Death_By_Beebles In Poetry

I haven't written in a long time. Some of that is do to the ever-increasing workload that I am taking, but mostly because I just haven't had the spark to write.

That said, I hope that you read this. I hope that you read it, and you get angry or sad. I hope you read it and feel some emotion. I hope you read it and wonder what I'm trying to say. I hope you read it, and think about it.

I imagine a sunset.
I imagine a sunset over hot sand.
Clear, cold, brutal
I imagine

Bombs are falling.
Children are praying.
Guns are firing, metal
is shrieking, men are
screaming
screaming
screaming out to God
and brother for salvation
Glass is breaking,
Women are crying.
And everyone is playing
a game of deadly
cat-and-mouse
that none will ever win.

I imagine a sunset,
and I wonder
Is sunset beautiful there?
(And silently in the recess of my mind I ask)
Is there such a thing as beauty
in a world of fire and hate?

Comments

amandapearl2

on Mar 07, 2006

I think this is ok, but were you trying too hard to be poetic? I konw you want to provoke emotion. The idea is there, but maybe not the words. Keep working on it, and mind, I'm not trying to be critical, I've just liked some of your other stuff better.

mignuna

on Mar 07, 2006

i think you espressed your thoughts beautifully beebes. your empathy is clear and i applaud you for it.

mig xxx

Zoologist03

on Mar 08, 2006

Hmm...it's working for me. I can feel that....

I'll agree with mig on this, lots of empathy and very nicely done.

~Zoo

Death_By_Beebles

on Mar 08, 2006

I never asked you to like it. It has been a long time since I've written anything though. Maybe I was trying too hard.

Hyperborean Wanderer

on Mar 08, 2006

Is sunset beautiful there?

yes, it is. So is sunrise. Mostly. Will I be thought a hack by inadvertantly quoting Madonna and saying 'Beauty is where you find it." ?

amandapearl2

on Mar 09, 2006

I know that, and I don't ask you to like mine. So long as you like it, well then that's all that matters. I am glad to see you've updated, that always makes me happy!

Buddah Moskowitz

on Mar 14, 2006

Beebs - I admire taking on this subject matter. It is a little undisciplined, but that's not a weakness. I guess what's lacking is your emotional response to it. I can tell what you're thinking, but what are you feeling? Still, a good poem needing a little bit of polish.

Shalom

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