Without You

Published on August 11, 2004 By Death_By_Beebles In Misc

Recently I had a pretty bad arguement with my girlfriend. After we kissed and made up, I wrote this poem to her. It's short, but I hope you all enjoy it.

What is speech without words?
What is sight without light?
What is touch without hands?
What is love, without you?

Comments (Page 1)

carebear07

on Aug 11, 2004

Awww...how sweet of you Alex.

~carebear~

Death_By_Beebles

on Aug 11, 2004

I try.

Poetry is a hobby. Helps relieve stress.

They need a Poetry blog classification.

Peace,

Beebes

dharmagrl

on Aug 11, 2004

They need a Poetry blog classification.

There's a group called anti-prose.joeuser.com that you can post under.

wuxiaomao

on Aug 11, 2004

that's really cute, I bet she ate it up!

citahellion

on Aug 11, 2004

That is nice. I'm going to go out on a limb here, though, and say that for the sake of visual aesthetics you should put a comma before the 'without' in all four lines. The last line doesn't need to give itself away like that; a little extra subtlety is preferred.

Death_By_Beebles

on Aug 12, 2004

Hmmm...

That extra comma isn't in the original version. It's probably a typo on my part, but I see what you are saying.

Thanks!

Peace,

Beebes

wuxiaomao

on Aug 12, 2004

extra subtlety is preferred.

but he already has her, he doesn't need to be subltle or aesthetically correct!!! That's love! it follows no norm!!

Zoologist03

on Aug 12, 2004

Well, aren't you just sweet?...hehe...You did good....although I didn't even though you had a fight....always looked like you were getting along to me.....

~Zoo

DeeDee18266

on Aug 12, 2004

Alex,

i love the poem, it is beautiful. I love you to death!!!!

Yours,
Sam

Zoologist03

on Aug 12, 2004

That is so beautiful...ya'll made up....*sniff*.....

~Zoo

(Hey, I'm actually being serious for once)

blondelife

on Aug 14, 2004

That was a good poem. Just remember you can make poems easy and make up easy to if you just express how you trully feel. Quote!

~blondelife~

Death_By_Beebles

on Aug 14, 2004

Actually Shaun and Jess, we made up at band camp.

But thanks for the support.

I wrote this poem right after we had our big fight.

And Sam, even though I doubt you'll see this, I love you to death right back.

Peace,

Beebes

carebear07

on Aug 14, 2004

Man, you guys are so slow on the info! lol. I think you're like the only one who didn't know Shaun! Who do you get your info from? lol.

~carebear~

Death_By_Beebles

on Aug 14, 2004

See, that's the thing Ash. Shaun doesn't get any info. He's more out of the loop than me!

Peace,

Beebes

blondelife

on Aug 15, 2004

Actually Shaun and Jess, we made up at band camp.

Yeah i already knew that you made up. Also alex go to my website and read an article it has to do with you.

~blondelife~

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